It’s almost that time again!
I have a new murder mystery coming out
and I need some help with the tag line and blurb (the book’s back cover description).
YOUR INPUT COULD BE CRITICAL!
Tell me which of the following tag lines you prefer, and then which blurb. Then feel free to offer your own suggestions.
Tag lines:
A). A deranged killer panics a city by brutally attacking seven victims in fourteen days—and then goes after the detectives hunting him. 22 words
B.) The detectives hunting the serial killer want to stop his rampage. So he sets his sights on them. 18 words
Blurbs:
A.) A lone trucker is ambushed, shot, and then brutally stabbed to death in a Tampa warehouse, creating a crime scene so bloody it looks like something from a horror movie. Detectives Martin and Sanderson begin searching for a madman with a uniquely sick style of killing, when a jogger is murdered nearby in the same gruesome manner—and the hunt is on for a crazed serial killer. Five more of the violent attacks happen within a week, launching the entire city into a panic. The mayor agrees to throw all the city’s resources into halting the bloody rampage, but things may already be spiraling out of control. Detectives Martin and Sanderson frantically work around the clock to find their murderer and stop the carnage, but they don’t know the serial killer has decided to take his game to the next level—by making them his next victims. 148 words
B.) A lone trucker is ambushed, shot, and brutally stabbed. A tourist meets the same fate while out for a jog. Facing two crime scenes that could have been in a horror movie, Detectives Martin and Sanderson search for the crazed serial killer. When five more attacks happen in a week, launching the entire city into a panic, the mayor throws all of the city’s resources into stopping the rampage. But while the detectives work around the clock, they don’t know the killer has upped the game—by making them his next targets. 92 words
Please tell me your choices below in the comment section!
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I’ll need beta readers to read my amazing new story and point out typos or other errors like plot holes and timeline mistakes – anything a regular reader would be upset about.
Beta readers will get an advance copy of the manuscript sometime in September, will have about two weeks to read it and send back comments, and will be asked – but not required – to purchase the 99 cent anthology Death and Damages in which my book occurs, then post a review on Amazon.
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Thanks!
Dan Alatorre 
I like A) for the tagline but remove the word by and B) for the blurb- sounds thrilling!
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Thank you for voting!
(If you are a murder mystery fan and want to be a beta reader for this novel in September, let me know! Use the “contact me” button to get on the list.)
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So change tag line “A” to:
A deranged killer panics a city, brutally attacking seven victims in fourteen days—and then goes after the detectives hunting him.
Like that?
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Yes, has more punch IMO 🙂
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Awesome. Thanks!
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I agree with Jacquie on the blurb – Def B… But the tag I like the succinctness of B!
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That’s why we ask! Thank you!
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😁
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I like Tagline A and Blurb B.
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Good deal. Thanks!
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Tagline A and Blurb B.
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Ooh, a consensus is beginning to form…
Thank you!
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I like B blurb better. Taglines seem to be a little long to me. This is what sticks in my mind: The hunters become the hunted. Who will be next?
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Rebel.
Thanks!
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Seven brutal murders in fourteen days, this is no ordinary serial killer and now he’s after the detectives.
Blurb B – you could omit ‘launching the entire city into a panic’ because we assume that from the rapid death toll and the actions of the mayor.
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Nice work! Thank you!
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Tag line A I think. Blurb B
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I had no idea it would be this lopsided. Thank you!
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I like tagline B and blurb A. The second tagline is much more concise. The first one seems too wordy. But with using that tagline, I like the fleshed out blurb better. It tells me more about the book. Hope that helps.
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Ha! The reverse of the crowd. Awesome.
Well, as you know, it’s a balance between brevity, impact, emotion and information.
Your input helps a lot! Thank you!
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tagline B blurb B
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Hey, did somebody put you up to that? Nobody else voted that way…
Thanks for the input!
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I’d use blurb B but don’t use a tagline
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Normally I don’t. Maybe I should but I just tend to think it’s not necessary. In this case, the compilers of the death and damages anthology are asking us all to create a tagline for our individual books and a blurb as well. But it was a fun exercise and I’m learning a lot from you guys so it’s worth it.
Thanks for the input!
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