How To Interrupt

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In a recent critique, I noticed something we all do occasionally. See if you can spot it.

Once in the solarium, they find a bench and sit down, continuing their conversation. The words flow between them, without the need to think or endure an awkward pause. Candace finds herself genuinely having a good time. It’s been so long since she took some time to have fun.

Evan interrupts her musings, saying, “I have really enjoyed your company, Candace. I hope we can get together again.  We can take it one day at a time, no expectations.  I would much rather go out to dinner with you than my sister.” He quietly laughs.

No big deal, but it’s the interruption.

Why broadcast it? We will see him do it when he speaks, so there’s no need to say he’s about to do what he’s about to do.


Candace finds herself genuinely having a good time, it’s been so long since she took some time to have fun. Evan seems –

“I really have enjoyed your company, Kelly. “Edward smiled, pulling away. “And I hope…

See? Don’t announce the interruption of her thoughts, just interrupt – and write in such a way that the reader reads it as an interruption.

That’s your tip for the day.

Don’t have a lot of interruptions in your dialogue? Maybe you should add one on occasion. It’ll make your dialogues snappier. (In real life, people interrupt all the time.)

Interrupting adds a tiny element of tension, too, as we

  • (a) wait for the point to be made or
  • (b) veer off wherever the interruption is taking us.

And if done correctly it will engage your reader better in your story!

If you find little suggestions like this helpful, you’ can get a bunch of them. Simply enter my Word Weaver Writing Contest, and each entry gets a critique by ME!

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For details on how to enter and get your critique, click HERE

Food For Thought (a.k.a. A Writely Kick in The Rear)


Let’s be honest, you have to be able to lift your own spirits sometimes. because those who’d like to help usually mean well but can’t actually help, and those who CAN help may be unavailable. It’s up to you. No one can write your book for you (and if they do, what’s the point?)


3 Tips On How To Win A Writing Contest

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See? We have a snazzy logo and everything.

You should click over and enter right now. You know you want to.

Many of you are writers and would love to be authors, would love to be published…

But it’s kind of daunting to put your work out there to agents and important people like publishers.


Well, with over a dozen and a half published titles, I can tell you – you eventually get over that fear.

One way to do it is to put samples of your writing out there for the world to see.

And writing contests are a good way to do that.

Now, you may or may not win the contest – it’s more fun if you do – but simply entering is a big deal. Other people are finally going to see your work. And in this case, if it needs help, you’ll get suggestions.


In my contest, I’m going to give EVERY ENTRY FEEDBACK that will help get their work to the next level.

Possibly, to get it ready to be published.

A lot of people who enter will get a share of $400+ in prizes.

That’s also good.

Now, the funny thing about bloggers is: often if they are going to sell you a book on how to do something, they have blogged about it, too. If you look through their blog enough, you will find basically everything in the book and not have to pay for it. 

Or like me, you can put all kinds of crazy awesome MARKETING TIPS in a book they get for free by signing up for their newsletter. Trade your email for a $20 book on marketing ideas and a promise not to spam? I call that a good deal.

Anyway, here are some of the things I’m going to look for.


  1. A grabber opening.

  2. NOT giant blocks of descriptions.

  3. Well-written dialogue.


I tend to be lazy and any reading outside of a person’s job is supposed to be for leisure – as in, FUN. So when I see just pages and pages without the white space that indicates a paragraph break, I get a little twitchy.

love dialogue.

Chuck Wendig once referred to dialogue as candy, and he’s right.

And let’s face it, a story that hooks the reader right away is gonna do better than one that waits three chapters to do it, right?

But if you can do it in the first paragraph, or even better in the opening sentence, that’s big. That’s why openings are hard to do, and even harder to do well.

The other thing you can do to help your story is not have too much going on in chapter 1. (I’ve addressed that before.) Now, I’m not saying you have to submit chapter 1 of your book to a contest; I’m saying whatever you do submit should be interesting. But if you submit chapter 1, there are five things you need to have happening in chapter 1 as referenced by my blog post about that – which you’ll see if you click that link.

Finally, it’s never a bad idea to ask a question in chapter 1 that we have to turn the page and start chapter 2 to find the answer to.

That is what I call a cliffhanger ending.


If you can do some or all of those things, you are going to thrill your readers a lot more than the average bear.

One last tip.

A writing contest is kind of similar to a chili cooking contest.

Each November I go to a neighborhood chili cook-off. Some of the people who host it are from Texas, and Texans are apparently crazy for chili, to the point where they are willing to fistfight you over whether it can have beans in it or not.

I’m not going to say if I if I am of the pro bean or anti-bean consortium, I’m simply going to say Texans are a little batty.

If you know any Texans, you know this. Nice people. Hard working. Loyal.

But kinda bonkers.


The key to winning a chili eating contest is not to prepare a bowl of chili that would satisfy somebody at dinner.

Wait, what?

That’s right.

In a contest, you have to grab the chili judge’s attention with the equivalent of a taste. A tablespoon. That’s it.

And what you would put into a tablespoon to catch the eye of the chili judge – or tongue, I guess – is not necessarily what should be in a bowl of chili you are going to eat for dinner. The sample is probably spicier than the whole bowl. Meatier. Other stuffier.

Similarly, a writing contest offers the same challenge.

Your opening paragraph is really really really – really really really! – really really REALLY important.

If I can’t get through that, things do not bode well for the rest of the story no matter how gripping it is.

I know. It’s unfair. Talk to me about people who make an awesome bowl of chili and can’t win a damn contest. I totally get it. What’s the deal with those Texans? Beans are not illegal! And beans are good for you. Maybe if they incorporated an occasional bean into their cowbeef-laden maw they wouldn’t all keel over from heart attacks at age 50, you know? And what’s with that drawl, anyway? It’s 2018. You have TVs and cell phones. Learn to talk normal already.

Anyway, that’s kinda how it is with your story.

Not the Texan nonsense, the judge-sample stuff.

I’m not going to stop at the first paragraph of your story unless it’s really horrible and awful and terrible and bad. I’m just not. I’m nicer than that – but not much nicer. Because I’m a lazy reader, as are most readers. Your published book fights for shelf space against every other writer in the world, and possibly crazy Texans, too. It has to stand out.

Your first paragraph should grab the reader’s interest. That is the first taste of your chili.

After that, the rest of the opening  should make the reader want to read on – just like a taste of chili should make you want to eat more chili, not run to the bathroom or guzzle a glass of water.

Okay, let’s get away from that whole chili comparison thing. It’s getting silly.

For me, I love a great voice.

Most of you struggle to find your voice, but those of you who do find it will engage your reader in ways you never knew possible. The reader will feel like you were speaking to them on a one-to-one basis, and it really doesn’t get much better than that.


Okay, there are some tips. You are armed to the teeth with writing advice AND advice on Texans. A twofer.


Get to writing

And go enter my contest.

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Give Yourself A Pat On The Back!

people-2607201_1280We work hard at this writing stuff. We deserve a pat on the back once in while.

And who else is gonna understand anyway? Except other writer types?

The biggest things writers lack is confidence, and that starts by acknowledging that what we did is worth some praise.

Big or small, let’s talk about them all – and build that confidence we all need.

Applaud YOUR writing accomplishments for the week here.

Or praise another author friend who did something worth noting.


Imagine if you saw 10 other people telling you your accomplishment was noteworthy. What difference could that make in your writing the next week?

Let’s find out.

WRITING CONTEST – Tick Tock, we are halfway to the end of our contest period!

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the March 2018

Word Weaver Writing Contest!

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John Darryl Winston,   Lucy Brazier,   J. A. Allen

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Allison Maruska,   Jenifer Ruff

(all celebrity judges from 2017 and 2018 will be rotated out and will be invited back for a supercontest at year end)

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and a new bonus

ALL entries will be critiqued by ME!

Yep, I’m going to personally critique your submission.

Wow, I’m gonna be busy. But you’re worth it. Probably.


Enter your amazing piece of writing! Or two! Or more! I and my hand-selected celebrity judge panel of bestselling authors will decide the winners and award a HUGE prize package plus some other amazing goodies. (Last time, contestants entering multiple pieces allowed me to find a story I liked.) 

YOU will have the month of MARCH 2018 to enter an amazing piece of your own writing to my contest.

Seems pretty straightforward, right? Yeah. It is. That’s how I roll.

Here’s what you do:

Yep, you guessed it. Enter a piece of your writing in the contest. I try to keep it simple.

The contest “theme” is intentionally broad:


Does that mean Jack the Ripper? Does that mean a boy and his dog? (Like, if one kills the other?)

I don’t know. That’s up to you! I’m pretty loose on these things.

What can you win?

Scroll down a little, impatient one.


The FIRST PRIZE winner will receive:

THIS prize package valued at over $150:


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That’s a pretty good first prize package!

Do I have your attention now?

51eRlHYLzJL._SY346_.jpgI expect we will publish another anthology in 2018, combining bestselling authors and established writers with first timers again. (Our October 2017 “scary anthology” called The Box Under The Bed, topped the charts at #1.)

  • The first place winner of this contest will be guaranteed a spot in the new anthology.

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  • Other contestants may be asked to join the anthology as well!


  • edit & critique process,

  • collaboration with other published authors in a private Facebook group created for the anthology

  • book cover, showing the creative process

  • get beta readers,

  • the whole nine yards.


  • That’s kind of a big deal

You’ll have the whole month of March to create your masterpiece, OR EVEN BETTER – USE PART OF AN EXISTING BOOK.


The FIRST PLACE winner will also receive:

  • PUBLICATION of their winning piece on this website

  • A guest blog post or author profile to appear on this site


  • Did you see that gold medal picture? You get that picture to display. (I think it was originally a chocolate coin we gave to my daughter for losing a tooth, but it’s really cool looking!)

  • You’ll get to refer to yourself as an AWARD-WINNING author. Because you’ll be one. How cool is that?

Now… there are critiques?

Yep. We’ll get to that in a second. Check out the other top prizes first.

2The SECOND PLACE Winner will receive THIS prize package:

  • PUBLICATION of their winning piece on this website and consideration for publication in the anthology

  • $25 Amazon gift card

  • A guest blog post or author profile to appear on this site

  • slightly less massive bragging rights than first place (because that’s only fair)

  • Not a gold medal. Sorry.
  • FRIENDSHIP WITH ME, PROBABLY, because I wanna keep good writers close.
  • I think they get to refer to themselves as an AWARD-WINNING author, too. Second place is an award, right?

3The THIRD PLACE Winner will receive THIS prize package:

  • PUBLICATION of their winning piece on this website and consideration for publication in the anthology

  • $10 Amazon gift card

  • A guest blog post or author profile to appear on this site

  • also bragging rights because why not, but try not to outbrag the first and second place winners, okay?

  • also no gold medal. That’s really just for the #1 winner.
  • And still, I think they’re an award-winning author, too. A little less so than 1st and 2nd, but it still counts. And who’s gonna look it up and give you crap, anyway?

Oh, and I may award additional places like Fourth Place and Honorable Mention, etc. Don’t worry, this isn’t the fine print your mom said to worry about.




Yep, I’ll critique your work (up to 3,000 words), whether you win or not, just for entering.

I will spend an hour of my time giving you the Dan Treatment of your 3,000 word piece, just like I do in my private critique group. Don’t worry, I’m pretty nice and very encouraging. Most people like my crits. Not all, though. Some people are just babies.


It can be shorter. If you get it in 1250, you’re good to go.

If it’s longer than 3000, I may read all of it, but I’m only critiquing the first 3000 words. And 10k submissions haven’t won yet, either. So there’s that. Learn to select carefully. Just the best stuff.

I might spend more than an hour if it’s really good! But again, if you send 10k – I’m only human and I’m not gonna be able to wade through all that from you for this contest, okay? Doing critiques is a LOT of freaking work. Try to keep it to 3000 words and under.

Many participants who wrote stories for my contests were later INVITED to be in an anthology we published.


Getting the information, the encouragement, the support, and the hands-guidance you need to GET PUBLISHED.

Almost everyone who was in the October 2017 anthology has expressed an interest in doing it again. That puts you in there with bestselling authors and other published authors.

That’s definitely a big deal, whether you’ve been published before or not. Heck, I get excited about appearing in an anthology with big name people.

EACH ENTRY will receive an in-depth critique of their story by ME, as I said. That alone is worth the price of admission.


As the winner of the last contest, your help has been invaluable. The reason my books have not been published is I haven’t know where to start. I went through the whole “find an agent” and querying steps for my other book, but was tired of rejection. Now I have an author’s Facebook page, a blog, and a Twitter account that never existed in the world before. You walked me step-by-step through the process. We are nearing the end of the beta reader phase, so I think things are going to move pretty quickly now. Although I know the Moyhill package is going to be extremely helpful, you gave me an amazing critique of my book.

– Heather Kindt, author of Ruby Slips and Poker Chips

Hi Dan,
Wow, thank you so much for the critique. Amazing job, thank you. Dan, thank you so much for doing this. I feel as if I’ve found a great mentor, one who knows where my writing is coming from and hopefully to advise me where and how to get to the next level.
 Adele M
Hey Dan,
 You really know how to make my day! I’m so grateful for your detailed critique of my story. It’s wonderful to get this kind of feedback, and totally validates all the hours we put in, alone at our desks, writing our hearts out. To be honest, I jumped up and down and cheered so much, my dog thought I had gone completely berserk, not to mention my husband.
– Heather H
And there are hundreds more who have received my input on their manuscripts via my unique critique process.

Some are bestselling authors who will not publish a manuscript without me looking at it first!

Where else can you find established authors willing to reach out like that? Nowhere, that’s where. Well… here. But nowhere else probably.


“DOOR PRIZES” just for entering!

ALL contestants not winning first, second, or third place will be put into a drawing to win one of these other prizes!

How awesome is that? Stuff for you to win from these cool authors!

Allison Maruska

– Winner’s choice of 1 signed paperback, eBook, or audio book!

(Not all of her books are available in audio book format.)


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Quite the selection!

Joanne R. Larner

– a set of the Richard Liveth Yet (trilogy);

Dickon’s Diaries (single book).

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Heather Kindt

– 1 signed copy of Ruby Slips and Poker Chips

Anne Marie Andrus

– signed copies of Monsters & Angels

Russell Fellows

– A copy of both my books (electronic formats only)

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Sarah Brentyn

– signed paperback copies of flash fiction

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and stuff from me!


  • Several audio books of The Box Under The Bed (audio books are not autographed) will be awarded

  • Several autographed paperback copies of my bestselling books will be awarded

  • Several not-autographed copies of my eBooks will be awarded


NO LIMIT ON ENTRIES BY ANY ONE PERSON. You wanna enter 10 stories? Pay 10 fees. I’m totally okay with that.

You must enter an original piece of your own writing and pay the entry fee. Please don’t exceed 3,000 words (but if you’re a little over, fine. If you go 10k, I know you aren’t even trying. Shoot for 3k. You can do that, but don’t ruin your story chopping it to 3k, okay?Entries can be as short as you want. FEEL FREE  TO USE A CHAPTER OF YOUR UNRELEASED BOOK. (That’s what I’d do.)

THEME: To coincide with a new book I’m writing, the theme is MURDER/MYSTERY/SUSPENSE. That can be happy stuff, cozy mystery, violent stuff, psycho killer stuff, crime stuff (I guess murder is already a crime) detective stuff,  YOU NAME IT.  Totally your call. Don’t feel limited. I’m pretty loose with this aspect.  Wanna have some insights into what I like? Check out the prior winning entries from the last three contests (April, July and November) and not just the first place winners. In some way shape or form, your story must touch on the theme of MURDER/MYSTERY/SUSPENSE. Again, I’m pretty loose on this.

All entries must be submitted on or before midnight eastern time on March 31, 2018. There is a preset number of entries that will be allowed. When that number is reached, and it’s a LOT, no additional entries or fees will be accepted. When we get close, I’ll announce it on the blog – but if you get in early you’ll be fine. You’ll probably be fine anyway, but keep an eye on the blog just in case – or enter early, right? That will work, too. Did I mention to enter early? Because you should totally enter early.

There is NO restriction on genre other than murder/mystery/suspense – and I’m pretty loose on that anyway. Go crazy. You can have love in your psycho thriller.

You may submit a chapter or passage from your book if you so desire (I would – this is great publicity), but it should be an unpublished work.


You MUST submit your entry via the Contact Me button and pay your $20.00 entry fee (USD) via PayPal to .  PLEASE SEND A WORD DOCUMENT (WordPress text and PDFs mess up the formatting). Simply send me a message using the Contact Me button saying you want to enter and I’ll email you back; from there you’ll be able to attach your piece. IF YOU DO NOT GET A REPLY WITHING 24 HOURS, ASSUME AN EMAIL SCREW UP AND EMAIL ME AGAIN. (Not using Word? Attach it in whatever you used. If there’s a problem, I’ll let you know. But please try to use Word, okay?)


Void where prohibited. ALL entries will be subscribed to my email list. Don’t worry, I won’t spam you. (I don’t know how.) A lot of the entries’ email addresses don’t get on the list because it’s work and I’m lazy. Winners will be notified here on the blog in a big announcement, and they will be contacted by email, either by me or by the sponsor donating the prize, to make arrangements to get their prize – that might include a mailing address to deliver a paperback to. Winners who live outside of the country of the sponsor whose prize they won may be limited to a prize that can be emailed or sent electronically, like an eBook, audio book, PDF, or Amazon gift card. You still get your work published here, and the profile, etc., if you win those things, but sorry; mailing a paperback from here to Canada and other places is super expensive, so we’re letting you guys into the contest but we have to limit the costs that way. I’m sure you understand. NO LIMIT ON ENTRIES BY ANY ONE PERSON until our preset number is reached. You wanna enter 10 stories? Pay 10 fees. By entering you agree to all this stuff and that I pretty much get free reign in selecting the top 3 winners (along with help from our celebrity judges) but it’s probably gonna be stuff that appealed to me. Typos matter but content matters more. The rest of the winners will mostly be random drawing but I’m not above awarding stuff to a really great fourth place person. Or not.


unless I get an overwhelming amount of entries, and then I’ll delay that part but trust me you’ll know way in advance because I’ll be whining about it here on the blog.

You are probably a better writer than you think. Time to launch your rocket!

Tick tock. March 31, 2018, will be here before you know it.


img_2351-2REBLOG this! And please SHARE this post on Facebook and Twitter! Your friends need to know about this contest, too.

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You have questions. Ask away.

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This blog has long been a friendly place to come and learn, and what better way to learn than to ask?

You have questions. Writer stuff, marketing, motivation, you name it.


Your questions. Your challenges. Your issues.

If I don’t know, we’ll put it out to my vast network of author friends and get an answer. Or I’ll make something up.


Many people helped me when I was starting out because I was willing to ask what I needed to know.

That shortened my learning curve substantially.

– Dan Alatorre

So go ahead. Ask me anything.


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I’ve been asked numerous times to create a manual for people I critique for, so

here and there I’m gonna take a weekend and jot down some of my secrets.

Those of you who have enjoyed The Dan Treatment on your critiques will recall some wise bits of info being delivered, and might even wish some of it were available in a reference manual for you.

Well, I’ll get to everything in due course, but when Allison created S Is For Story, I thought it’d be a great idea for her friends – me among them – to take a topic and dive deep into it. 

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I said, what a great idea!

For those of you who have expertise on certain areas, let me know what topic you might wanna tackle. This could evolve into a series and eventually an anthology-type omnibus. Meanwhile, I’ll get back to work and on the next rainy weekend I’ll pop out another one of these.

This one will be on sale soon enough, but if you’d like to read it NOW and are prepared to sing its praises on Ammy – or say it sucks, I guess, because I’m asking for truth and not just praise – then use the Contact Me button and I’ll send you a copy!

Limited quantities. Hurry!

Feel free to share this with your friends.

Other Ideas That May Need Addressing For The Series

  • B is for Beta Readers, Blurb, (Why You Should) Blog, a Bad review
  • C is for Character Interview, Critique Partners, Conferences, Cliffhanger chapter endings, Contests
  • D is for Dialogue Tags, Death
  • E is for Editing, Easy To Read Means Hard Work In The Writing, Author Events
  • F is for Funny, Fresh Eyes, Flash Fiction, Find Time To Write
  • G is for Grabber Opening,
  • H is for Hook, Hesitate
  • I is for Interview (Character Interview), Doing an author Interview, Immersion, Indie (why every writer should learn indie even if they wanna be trad
  • J is for Jump Cut between scenes
  • K is for Kick ass dialogue, kick ass characters, kick ass stories, Editing Kills
  • L is for Love
  • M is for Mystery, Marketing
  • N is for Nothing Is What It Seems
  • O is for Outline, Opening lines, 5 things for your opening chapter
  • P is for Plot Twists, Pace, go where the Pain lives, Psycho, Paranormal
  • Q is for Quitting (stay motivated)
  • R is for Reaction Before Action, Character Reactions (not rushing on to the next exciting scene), React (Have A Character React The Way You Want The Audience To React), Realism
  • S is for Sex Scenes, Signings, Sample chapters, your blog Sucks, Steamy scenes
  • T is for Tension, Teasing
  • U is for 10 Things That Make Your Story Unreadable, Uncomfortable (getting out of your comfort zone)
  • V is for Vices (your characters, to make them interesting; yours that keep you from writing), Vampire Romances as in please no
  • W is for Write Drunk/Edit Sober, find time to write, the spousal fight that comes from writing all the time
  • X is for X rated, Xenophobe – how to write black characters if you’re white, and gay guys, and other stuff
  • Y is for yellow and describing other colors in your story like sunsets, Yearning (will they/won’t they in Moonlighting, Cheers, and a million other stories), or: YES! I made a book – now what?
  • Z is for Zoo as in describing animals and yes I mean poop smell but not just poop smell, Zombies (as in please no)