How to Keep the Spinach Out of Your Book

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As the comments from beta readers for Poggibonsi came in, one struck me as exceptionally productive—a lot more like a good critique than the other betas, and full of valuable input and observations.

I started chatting with its writer, and come to find out, she’s an editor! That explains a lot!

Julia Willson is probably not what most writers think an editor is like. She’s not a mean, nasty old guy with a cigar who sits behind a wood desk in a dingy office somewhere, growling every two or three minutes as he reads a manuscript, then going out at lunch to kicks puppies.

Uh, no. Julia is none of those bad things.

She has a fun, friendly demeanor and is extremely supportive, offering just the right amount of direction, suggestion, and hand holding. You’ll see her personality here, because I’ve asked her to do a few guest blog posts—and she graciously accepted. She’ll explain the editing process and help you get over your fear of editors in general, but you’ll also see just how very special she is.

Here’s Julia.


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Julia Willson

Your first book is written. How exciting! Now all you have to do is upload it and you’re a published author, right?


Not so fast, pardner.


Although no doubt you are all brilliant writers with an amazing grasp of the English language, nobody is perfect.


(But yes, I know—you’re SO close.)


You still need someone to take a look and make sure your words are clear, and convey the story or message you intended. They should be free of any distractions or potentially confusing or repetitive verbiage.


Reading a book with errors is like sitting across from a blind date who has spinach in his teeth*. Close your eyes and imagine you are there…


“Oh no, what is that? Ewww! It’s very distracting. I’m finding it difficult to focus on anything he is saying. Just . . . can’t . . . look . . . away!”


“I wonder—is he always like this? Maybe it’s just a one-time thing, or maybe there are all kinds of other icky things I will discover about him.”


“Ugh. I was really looking forward to this experience, but this blemish is really affecting the mood. It could have been so lovely, but now I just don’t know.”


“Honestly, I don’t think I can even stand looking at this any longer. Maybe it’s best if I just leave now and forget the whole thing.”


*This may or may not describe a date I’ve been on in real life. Sigh. #datingishard


Now go back and read those internal comments, but imagine someone is saying that about your book. I’ll wait here until you’re finished.


Ouch. The reader can’t focus on your words? She is getting a bad vibe? She might not even finish your book??


After all your hard work outlining and drafting and revising, of course you want your book to be breathtaking, right? You want your readers to gobble up every word, appreciate what you’ve done, and come back for more.

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The great news is that you don’t have to do this yourself—you can outsource it to a professional! In fact, you should really NOT attempt to do this yourself.


Why do I need to hire a professional editor? Can’t I just edit it myself?

Consider this: How many times have you looked at your manuscript since you began writing it?


Hold that thought—we’re coming back to it in a minute.


Our brains are amazing. They allow us to read quickly, process the words as a whole to determine the basic meaning, and even fill in gaps when there are missing, misspelled, or or repeated words. The more we read a certain passage, the more familiar (and perfect) it looks to our brain.


By the way, did you notice the extra word in the paragraph above? Maybe you did because the words were new to you. But odds are, if this were your manuscript, your brain would have skipped right over it!


Okay, so how many times have you looked at your manuscript since you began writing it? 20? 50? Lost track?

You, after review #37…

Your brain certainly must think your manuscript is absolute perfection by now!

That’s why you need a “fresh pair of eyes” (as we say in the biz) to find those little errors or opportunities. And ideally, someone who is specially trained to do so.


Is it going to hurt? I don’t really enjoy getting “constructive feedback”.

Believe it or not, my clients actually thank me for the feedback I give!

They appreciate the time and attention I spend carefully reviewing their documents, word by word and line by line.


And they know I will find things that their brains would likely miss.


Ideally, feedback should be balanced, highlighting what works well and is particularly enjoyable, in addition to potential problem areas.


For example, here’s some feedback I provided for a well-known author:

“I really enjoy your writing style: plenty of dialogue, short paragraphs, easy-to-visualize descriptions. There were several scenes that made me LOL, but it was also a sweet story with likeable characters.”


Even suggestions for improvement should have a positive spin, with potential solutions identified.


“The double entendres are great . . . the first few made me laugh. However, they tend to be a bit overdone [in some sections]. Consider cutting several and keeping just the strongest.”


Notice how I phrased that: “suggestions for improvement”.

Your editor should provide “potential upgrades” or “possible opportunities”, but never “negative feedback”.


Negative Example: “I don’t really like this character at all. He’s a real jerk.”*


Yuck—who wants that? That would just be demotivating and not helpful at all.

*PS: Your momma’s an unlikeable jerk.

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What specifically don’t you like about the character?

How can I make him more likeable?

How is this likely to impact the story line, or other characters?


Those types of details would be much more constructive.


What other qualities should I look for in a copy editor?

When seeking an editor to review your document, look for someone who is a good fit overall. Make sure they understand your preferences and writing style, and they make every effort to incorporate them.

Do you like using sentence fragments? Short, simple phrases. So powerful.

Do you prefer to use dashes—instead of colons (:)—to offset or emphasize words? That’s totally cool.

A great editor is a collaborative partner who makes simple corrections and adjustments without changing the flavor and essence of what you’ve written.

Authors who invest time and money in professional editing for their manuscripts ensure readers can focus on their brilliant words, and not get distracted with bits of “spinach”.
A high-quality editorial review polishes your words so they are showcased in the best possible light.

And doesn’t your book deserve that?


00 editsbyjulia 0Julia Willson ( is a freelance copyeditor and proofreader. She has a degree in Psychology from Penn State University and over 20 years of experience in training, writing, and editing in the corporate world. In addition to editing fiction and non-fiction manuscripts, Julia is an active member of her local Chamber of Commerce in Middletown, DE, and supports local businesses who need editorial services for their websites, signage, menus, or other documents. For fun, Julia enjoys laughing with her two teenage kids, listening to EDM, and collecting stuffed monkeys.


See? that wasn’t painful at all, was it? Not all editors are like Julia, which is why I asked her to come over and explain how good the editing process can be. We’ll be having her back again, soon!


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Dan Alatorre is the author of several bestsellers and the hilarious upcoming novel “Poggibonsi: an italian misadventure.” Click HERE to check out his other works.



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International bestselling author Dan Alatorre has 17 titles published in over a dozen languages. From Romance in Poggibonsi to action and adventure in the sci-fi thriller The Navigators, to comedies like Night Of The Colonoscopy: A Horror Story (Sort Of) and the heartwarming and humorous anecdotes about parenting in the popular Savvy Stories series, his knack for surprising audiences and making you laugh or cry - or hang onto the edge of your seat - has been enjoyed by audiences around the world. And you are guaranteed to get a page turner every time. “That’s my style,” Dan says. “Grab you on page one and then send you on a roller coaster ride, regardless of the story or genre.” Readers agree, making his string of #1 bestsellers popular across the globe. He will make you chuckle or shed tears, sometimes on the same page. His novels always contain twists and turns, and his nonfiction will stay in your heart forever. Dan resides in the Tampa area with his wife and daughter. You can find him blogging away almost every day on www.DanAlatorre or watch his hilarious YouTube show every week Writers Off Task With Friends. Dan’s marketing book 25 eBook Marketing Tips You Wish You Knew has been a valuable tool for new authors (it’s free if you subscribe to his newsletter) and his dedication to helping other authors is evident in his helpful blog.

12 thoughts on “How to Keep the Spinach Out of Your Book

  1. Thank you for this. Despite the trend that’s surging where there are no standards anymore, I’m glad someone agrees that published works (whether they’re blog posts, books, or newspaper articles) should be edited to the nth degree! 👍👌

  2. Great interview!

    For authors, especially first-time authors, the idea of handing over our babies to a stranger can be intimidating.

    I’m one of those readers easily drawn out of the story by poor editing, and I will put the book down without finishing it. With that in mind, I’d much rather have one person point out all my errors and tell me how to make my story better than have a bunch of rightfully upset readers label me as a terrible writer. If I can find an editor who can do it in a friendly manner, all the better…and probably much less painful than what we all imagine.

    I look forward to hearing more from Julia and learning about this all-important step in the publishing process!

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