Blurb Wars! Writer Friends Try Their Hand At Water Castle’s Blurb. (Wanna Give It A Shot Yourself?)

Too long! Too short! Wrong girl!

That’s the hardest part/parts of getting a cover and getting a blurb. It can drive you crazy!

Luckily, I am surrounded by lots and lots of smart writer types who can step up and help.

Like our good friend Marie Malo (check out her blog at who did a blurb rewrite for me, and came up with this:

On the tenth anniversary of her father’s death, fourteen-year-old Gina Martin finds herself drawn the park where he used to take her.

There, Gina discovers a portal that delivers her to the 1700’s where she meets a young Noble tasked with settling Spain’s La Florida territory. Compelled to spend time with him and the fascinating world she has found, Gina finds herself sneaking off after school and appearing in La Florida more and more – much to the ire of Philip’s counselor, Cero.

Falling for her prince, Gina ignores Cero, unfriendly natives, and the obvious discrepancies in her new friend, Summer. It isn’t until she discovers that Florida’s history, in her present day textbook, changes to reflect her actions the old world. These changes not only can rewrite the fate of her prince, but also set the modern world on a different path.

When a warring tribe attacks the Spanish settlement, Gina makes a risky escape through the portal. Back home, she is devastated to discover the tower housing the portal is slated for demolition.

Gina must choose between her life in the modern world, or her new life in the past – but the mysterious Cero’s books contain secrets that could change everything.

204 words

I like it! (But I like them all. I also hate them all. Except this one. I don’t hate it. Or the others, really. Sigh.)

And you know what? This is good practice for you guys, too.

Blurb writing might be like everything else: the more you do it, the better you get. I’d say my covers are better than when I started (but that’s not saying much, trust me). So it stands to reason blurb writing will improve with repetition.

Have a go at it!

Post your rewritten blurb for The Water Castle below!

Published by Dan Alatorre AUTHOR

International bestselling author Dan Alatorre has 17 titles published in over a dozen languages. From Romance in Poggibonsi to action and adventure in the sci-fi thriller The Navigators, to comedies like Night Of The Colonoscopy: A Horror Story (Sort Of) and the heartwarming and humorous anecdotes about parenting in the popular Savvy Stories series, his knack for surprising audiences and making you laugh or cry - or hang onto the edge of your seat - has been enjoyed by audiences around the world. And you are guaranteed to get a page turner every time. “That’s my style,” Dan says. “Grab you on page one and then send you on a roller coaster ride, regardless of the story or genre.” Readers agree, making his string of #1 bestsellers popular across the globe. He will make you chuckle or shed tears, sometimes on the same page. His novels always contain twists and turns, and his nonfiction will stay in your heart forever. Dan resides in the Tampa area with his wife and daughter. You can find him blogging away almost every day on www.DanAlatorre or watch his hilarious YouTube show every week Writers Off Task With Friends. Dan’s marketing book 25 eBook Marketing Tips You Wish You Knew has been a valuable tool for new authors (it’s free if you subscribe to his newsletter) and his dedication to helping other authors is evident in his helpful blog.

7 thoughts on “Blurb Wars! Writer Friends Try Their Hand At Water Castle’s Blurb. (Wanna Give It A Shot Yourself?)

  1. I like it too…except for the sentence to nowhere in the middle paragraph that should read…

    It isn’t until she discovers that Florida’s history, in her present day textbook, changes to reflect her actions the old world that she begins to see the whole picture and understand the gravity of her actions.

    But I tried…:)

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