Blurb Time for Ruby Slips and Poker Chips

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your humble host

Hi gang! Heather Kindt has been diligently editing her amazing manuscript, Ruby Slips And Poker Chips, and working on a blurb.

 

I asked her to send a few samples over to get your input. (Later we’ll see about book covers, too.)

 

A chapter from Heather’s story won 1st Prize in my July Word Weaver Writing Contest, and now the WHOLE manuscript is chugging along getting ready to be published later this year!

 

Have a look at these blurbs and tell us what you think.

Do any of these make you wanna read more?

 

Blurb #1

I hate this place—it sucks.

 

This is what second-grade teacher, Dottie Gale, thinks of her home in Quandary, Kansas. The tiny town is pretty much smack dab in the middle of nowhere. No mountains. No ocean. No life. Her ex-boyfriend and current school board member, Corbin Lane, cheated on her, making school functions more than a little awkward. But worst of all, a tornado named Maxine Westward, took over as principal of Dottie’s school and has made her life in Quandary a living hell.

 

When Dottie is chosen to go to a teacher’s conference in Las Vegas, she knows her life is going to change. Driving from Quandary to Vegas, three strangers enter her life. Through a string of situations involving poppies, flying monkeys, and a life-size sculpture of an iconic rock star the four soon become inseparable. So, Dottie is ready for battle when Westward and Corbin fly in on the first day of the conference. Her boss black mails her with stories of incarceration, thievery, and a steamy relationship with her travel companion, but Dottie knows that those who hurl insults shouldn’t hold secrets of their own.

190 words

 

 

 

 

Blurb #2

Quandary, Kansas is the epitome of dullsville—gray, flat, and windy. To make things worse, second-grade teacher, Dottie Gale’s ex-boyfriend is a member of the school board that hired Maxine Westward as the new principal of Quandary Elementary. Dottie is convinced that Maxine is a witch that came in on a tornado to inflict major damage.

 

LAS VEGAS, NEVADA is perfect for Dottie. It is the opposite of Quandary. So, when she gets the opportunity to go to Vegas for a teaching conference, she jumps at the chance. With resume in tow, Dottie begins the twelve-hundred-mile journey to her new life. Along the way, she picks up three strangers: Shay Fields, the brainless daredevil, Tina Steele, the heartless tramp, and Ezekiel Lyons, the momma’s boy. Through a string of situations that involve hitchhikers, incarceration, and flirtations, the four soon become inseparable. When Westward arrives on her broom in Vegas, Dottie is ready for battle. The problem is that the witch is ready, too.

163 words

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Blurb #3

Many people believe in fate, or an inevitable course of the universe. Imagine your life as a movie that you’ve never seen before on Netflix. It’s all written, the actors chosen, the action scenes shot, and the climactic, or anti-climactic ending predestined. You can’t watch the movie because you didn’t pay your bill, but it’s all there waiting, ready to play out in ninety minutes, or in some cases, ninety years.

 

Dottie Gale is ready to change her fate. She has too much drive and common sense to stay stuck in her hometown of Quandary, Kansas. As a small town teacher, she has a witch for a boss and an ex-boyfriend on the tiny school board. So, when a work trip to Las Vegas is presented to her, she jumps at the opportunity to change the course of her life.

 

With resume in tow, Dottie begins the twelve-hundred-mile journey to her new life. Along the way, she picks up three strangers: Shay Fields, the brainless daredevil, Tina Steele, the heartless tramp, and Ezekiel Lyons, the momma’s boy. Through a string of situations that involve hitchhikers, incarceration, and flirtations, the four soon become inseparable. When her boss arrives on a broom in Vegas, Dottie is ready for battle. The problem is the witch is ready, too.

215 words


Let me know your thoughts in the comments section below.

Remember, writing blurbs is hard, we all know that – so don’t be afraid to make suggestions!

Thanks!

14 thoughts on “Blurb Time for Ruby Slips and Poker Chips

  1. I really like the first blurb because the reader gets a glimpse into Dottie’s thoughts right away. How many people have said the same thing about a place or situation in their own lives? It’s an immediate connection that makes me want to know more about Dottie and her story.

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  2. I think I prefer Blurb#1 for a couple of reasons. I like the fact that we don’t know the strangers names yet. For me, it’s better to discover them only when we read the book. And I also love the string of situations which make them become inseparable. What on earth happens with these poppies, flying monkeys and a life-size statue of a rock star? That description really makes me want to know more…

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  3. Thank you for your input so far. Right now it looks like either 1 or 2. My husband says he likes number 2 because it doesn’t give too much away, but maybe number one is more fun?

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  4. I like number 1 without the first paragraph. The second paragraph cuts right to the action without giving away too much information. The second paragraph is intriguing and short. Shorter is better.

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  5. The first statements in #1 & #2 gave me a bummed out feeling. “I hate this place, it sucks” why on earth would I want to continue reading… I want to go someplace where it doesn’t suck, especially when I am reading… Then to tell me how “dullsville” some place is.. I realize they are setting a tone, however they made me want to scroll right on past.

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