Need a favor

Need a favor. I have a book in Do No Harm, a collaborative box set that went live today. Each author has to get 10 reviews posted for their book. If you have read The Gamma Sequence by me, or Only Wrong Once, by my friend Jenifer Ruff, could you please post a quick review on this link and say it’s for that specific book. Here is the link:

https://www.amazon.com/Do-No-Harm-Seventeen-Thrillers-ebook/dp/B07RFSSQZ4

Here is how to find your past reviews so you can just copy.

• Go to Amazon

• Your Account

• Orders and Shopping Preferences

• Your Amazon Profile – should see all your reviews

Thank you!!!

A Taste Of The “Fun” In My Intense Murder Mystery Double Blind

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My murder mystery Double Blind is intense and filled with very dramatic – and occasionally gruesome – scenes. Two detectives are hunting a serial killer while the killer is hunting them. It’s not a “cozy” mystery.

The two detectives are partners, but they are also friends – and that’s where the book gets the charm readers love.

I was formatting the paperback version today for its imminent release, and I happened upon this scene. A recent review noted how real the characters are, and that’s because of how they interact, their dialogue, their unspoken moments – but also how

they give each other crap, as friends do.

This scene made me chuckle about how much they like and trust each other, and what good friends they are.

Check it out.


After swirling the wine around in her glass, Carly took a long drink. She closed her eyes and let her head ease back into the couch cushion. “Okay, what happened out there?”

Sergio shrugged. “I got ambitious and—”

“I heard what you told the lieutenant. Now I want the truth.”

“That is the truth.”

“Hey.” She leaned forward. “It’s me.”

DOUBLE BLIND 3DHer eyes stayed on his, not like an angry wife or an upset mother, but like a friend and partner who needed to know. Who deserved to know.

“Okay, I froze.” Sergio glanced around the room. “I wanted it to be our guy so I could take him down, or maybe just get the thing ended, but also . . . I was thinking about Franklin. And the victims. I was thinking about a lot of stuff.”

“Well, there’s the problem.”

“I wasn’t focused.”

She wagged a finger at him. “You were trying to think.”

“Thanks.”

“That’s not what I mean and you know it. I mean you’re a good cop and you were analyzing things when you should have been in the zone and reacting.”

He stared at the beer bottle. “Maybe.”

“Not maybe. Let me ask you this.” She sat up, pointing a finger at him with her wine glass hand. “Did you think it was our killer? I mean inside, on a primal level, where we just react, did you think it was the guy?”

“I felt like . . .” He took a deep breath and let it out slowly. “I thought it could be something bad, but, no. On a gut level, I didn’t think I was staring our serial killer in the face.”

She sat back. “I’ve gone through a few doors with you, Marty. I won’t be worried when we go through the next one, and don’t you be. What happened tonight, that could have happened to any of us. Tomorrow’s my turn. But tonight, if I’m wearing the wire and approaching that guy, I’m thinking it’s our killer. I’ll be ready to unload my magazine into him if he asked for a cigarette.”

“I wasn’t that bad.”

“That’s right. You weren’t. So drink up. We live to fight another day.”

“Tell that to Breitinger.”

“I did.” She swigged her wine. “He gets it. He told me you were off your game tonight and I told him you’d be back on it tomorrow when it’s my turn.”

“When did you have time for all that?”

“You took a while to get out of that surveillance gear.”

“What did he say?”

“He said maybe the operation needs to slow down.”

“It can’t slow down! It’s been—”

“Chill, partner. I told him it can’t slow down, too. We have zero apprehensions and a lot of victims. Slowing down is not the answer.”

Sergio eyed her. “So now what?”

“Well.” She folded her hands across her abdomen, securing the wine glass between her fingers. “He said I should take you out and get you drunk. So, cheers.”

Sergio took a gulp of his beer. “I should drink here more often. Kyle likes the good stuff.”

“Kyle sticks to wine.”

“Well, I appreciate you buying good beer in case I stop by. Last time I was here, you made me drink Bud.”

“I didn’t buy it. You gave us that last Christmas, as a present. I finally put it in the fridge yesterday.”

“How’d you know I’d be coming?”

“Christmas is coming, Marty. There are these things called Christmas parties. I knew somebody’d drink it.”

He took another gulp. “You’ll need to get more, because I’m going to drink the whole case.”

She swirled her wine. “That’ll be difficult. You only gave us a six-pack.”


A smile, right? And this happens immediately after a very intense scene.

It’s an awesome book. You should check it out.

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62 reviews, and almost all of them are 5-stars.

They can’t all be relatives.

 

 

Just finished Double Blind. Good grief your mind concocted THAT  and also does children’s stories?

From a reader:

Oh my! Just finished Double Blind.

Good grief your plot and mind that concocted THAT  and also does children’s stories leaves me in amazement.

At first I almost stopped reading as it was just plain gory and sickening to spend time reading about people at the mercy of their repulsive delusions. I might have stopped but I had such a favorable impression of your personality and I had promised to read it. I have to say now I’m truly glad I did. I do read fast and I kinda sped through a few sections wanting to get more details. I liked Carley and Sergio, felt they could be real people, and actually understood the motivations of the others because you fleshed out their characters so well. One thing I didn’t quite get was how Big Brass turned into such a staunch guy so quickly for Johnny, I expected at the end in the hospital room to find out he was undercover…I could write so much more but by now you know I thought the plot was outstanding, triple convoluted, and so well thought out.

A reader gets sucked into the story as the descriptions and dialog make it seem real.

There were a few times I just wanted to warn the characters because their analysis was so off base, but then it would be just that way if those things had really happened. You are truly gifted I think. So now I will be looking up the next case of your dynamic duo but I hope, being a little old grandma and all, that it won’t be quite so graphic. I’ll write a review tomorrow, you’ll get high marks. Great work! 

“A Must Read Medical Thriller” – Gotta Love That!

A recent review on Amazon:

July 22, 2019 “A Must Read Medical Thriller”

I couldn’t put this book down.

You will have to set aside your day because once you start the story, you have to continue to the end.

I absolutely loved the characters and the story line.

Dan Alatorre’s writing is excellent.

I appreciated all the research he had to have done to create such a visual representation of events that could actually take place. The ending has an unexpected twist.

Dan Alatorre is an extremely talented author.

I can see this story becoming a movie someday in the near future!

What a nice review. I’m almost blushing.
Almost.

Can you see me smiling from where you’re sitting?

Hollywood, are you listening???

Wanna see what all the fuss is about? Right now, The Gamma Sequence is part of the “Do No Harm” box set: 17 novels, all for 99 cents – but this deal ends VERY soon. You can read The Gamma Sequence NOW by joining my Readers Club, then you can preorder Do No Harm for 99 cents, and when it releases on July 31 you’ll be able to post a review AND start enjoying the other 16 other complete novels.

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What’s The Role of a BETA READER?

img_2351-19If I do my job properly as a writer, I have put together what in my head is a relatively cohesive, interesting story.*

That’s it. In a nutshell, that’s my job.

The role of a BETA READER is to:

read the finished manuscript (book, story, whatever) before it is released to the general public and give the author feedback.

That’s it.

The Beta can do as much or as little as they want, or as much or as little as the author asks.

Pretty blurry job description, isn’t it?

Yep.

Let’s go back to me and my job as a writer for a sec. Occasionally, I am wrong about the whole “cohesive story” thing. Sometimes we writers just write stuff that makes great sense to us – and no sense to anyone else.

Ooh, he’s so metaphysical.

Or, maybe he’s freaking obtuse.

It’s hard to tell sometimes. The old barn was a metaphor for the MC’s marriage, but the wrecked car wasn’t. Unless you want it to be, dear reader; then it absolutely was.

Assuming that we didn’t go completely bananas and write some fog of a diatribe, my critique partners will point out glaring errors in passive voice or grammar or missing words or missing quotes. That’s their job.

So when I’m done listening to what my Critique Partners have to say, I fold in their suggestions (or ignore them at my peril) and then I give the book one more look and decide it’s ready for the general public.

Typo!
Typo!

That’s where the beta reader comes in.

There’s nothing like sending your manuscript out to thousands of people and having them write back and say you had a typographical error in the first friggin’ page, or ask how the butler could do it when he wasn’t even present when the murder happened!

Oops.

The point is, your critique partners are really looking at your story a little differently from a regular reader. CPs will probably enjoy your story, but they are not reading it only to enjoy it. They are reading it to make sure it makes sense, to make sure that flows, to make sure that there’s a good pace, to make sure there’s no grammatical errors, to make sure your quotes and commas and words are all properly in place and spelled right. What they’re not doing is saying, “Let me just pick this story up and read it cover to cover like a regular would. Not their job.

That’s the role of the beta reader.

To simply read the story and give you whatever feedback they happen to assess from it.

For some, it’s going to be, “Hey there were no typos, there were no grammatical errors, it’s good to go.” For others it’s going to be, “You didn’t develop these characters enough in the beginning, so I don’t care about them enough halfway through when you start killing them off.”

In my head, my story flows pretty smoothly – I knew what I meant to say with just about every chapter, every paragraph, every sentence…

Maybe not every word, but, you know; I do my best.

So when I have all my chapters together, I will release it to a second set of critique partners – who get to read it more like a book and less like a critique.

They are pretty happy with that, those CPs who got to do it that way. They’re almostbeta readers

The job of the beta reader for me is just to read it make sure that what I intended to be there is there. If they see errors, point them out; otherwise, “Good story, it worked/did not work for me” – and not every story is gonna work for every reader. We know that.

So for me the job of the beta reader is basically… whatever the beta reader thinks it is.

Some look for grammar, some look for content, some look for jokes.

I’m happy with all that.

If they all write back and say, “This is the best thing that ever read!” I’m good with that, too.

* My real definition is: a well told story with interesting characters told in a compelling manner, but who’s counting.

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Dan Alatorre is the author of several bestsellers, including the fast-paced murder mystery Double Blind.

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Music to my ears

Hi, Dan!  I wanted to tell you how much I enjoyed reading Double Blind.  I gave you a glowing review on Goodreads since I loved this story.
I found myself really interested in what would happen to Carly, Sergio and everyone else.  You generate characters that speak and behave like real people.  I enjoyed the read a lot, thanks.
Have a great night!  I’ll talk to you later.