How did you get inside the mind of psycho killer in Double Blind?

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From time to time I get a letter from a writerly type, asking me for input on a writing topic. Here’s one.

Dear Dan,

How on earth did you get inside the mind of such a shocking psycho in Double Blind?

I’m having a very hard time with that myself – my killers aren’t that evil.

Signed,

Wondering Writer

 

DOUBLE BLIND 3DDear Wondering,

How did I?

Hmm…

Well, in Double Blind I laid out some parameters of what I thought he’d do and think, based on stuff I’d read online about psychos, and stuff I’d seen in movies or read in books…

And then I said, he has to have urges or whatever, like an itch he can’t scratch, that make these actions beyond his control – like a wild animal that is hungry and must eat or they starve.

Like a lion in the jungle; if they don’t kill, they don’t eat.

It’s what they do, so they have to do it.

Then I dwelled there, showing the reader what I’d see and feel if I were doing it.

So how did I figure that part out?

An author friend once had a scene where a guy had to take a car and drive over what were essentially zombies to get away, and she said, “How do I describe what it’s like to run people over?”

Having never actually run people over, I assume, she was a bit lost.

I was like, well, on Mythbusters they’re always saying pig muscles are a good substitute for human muscles (like if you need to see how far a bullet penetrates), so what would be a good substitute for running over people? People are 90% water and some hard stuff. What’s like bones? Rocks? Tree limbs? And in a car, we’ve all driven over a speed bump; I bet that’s like running over a body. So, pile some up and drive over it! You’re halfway home: you have the information. But how do you relate it to a reader?

Having driven over a few large sticks in my time, I said you receive information in a car from the gourd up: first your feet feel a jolt, then your butt, then your hands through the steering wheel; maybe up your spine – I just broke down into detail what happened so I could transfer that information to a reader.

Same in Double Blind.

If you’ve ever cut up raw chicken for dinner, or a steak, there’s a feel to it.

Meat is meat; cutting a steak feels like cutting a human body.

And who’s going to say you’re wrong? Killers?

You think in detail about the process (for a reason I’ll explain in a sec), how using a serrated knife sends information up your hand and arm – and then what else would you feel (if it were a body, and the key word is FEEL)? Warm wet stuff, if you were stabbing a body; the knife never cuts smoothly when I’m cutting a chicken for dinner, so the killer’s knife would hang up on a bone or joint. Laying that out and adding the killer’s mental impulses like having to do it or needing to do it, to get relief – and then pushing it all as a package beyond what any normal person would ever do.

  • Also, a lot of killers like the feeling afterward, or during, like a sexual rush, so you can add part of that.
  • And many times there’s a degrading aspect they need to have over the victims, so you add that.

Lots of adding, right?

But wait, there’s more!

In Stephen King’s book Pet Sematary, there’s a scene where a college student gets hit by a car and his friends take him to the main character’s clinic, and King describes the guy’s brains showing. King dwells there for a while, and I realized how gross it was for me, “seeing” the guy’s brains as he laid there on the carpet – so it would be really gross for others.

And that was the genius.

Everyone who reads that gets a little uncomfortable because King dwelled there.

When I read a book or watch a movie, if it’s scary or whatever and it made an impact on me, I’ll watch it twice.

I watch it the first time to enjoy it, and then I watch it a second time – to learn.

  • When did I like this character? Why did I like them? What did the author do to make me like the character?
  • When did I start to feel scared in this movie? What was making me scared? How did the director lay the blocks to build to that feeling?

When you find it, you usually see the author or director dwells there.

So in Double Bind, I dwelled there. A lot. In the mental stuff and in the physical stuff the killer did. A lot of people thought I overdid it, and maybe they were right; we’ll see in book 2 because I wasn’t planning on being so “in the mind” of the killer, but it’s not finished being written yet, either!

Great question. Hope my answer helped.

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From Amazon reviews of my murder mystery Double Blind

“Dan Alatorre is one of the best mystery/thriller writers ever!” Cheryl Shearin, Amazon review

“Shortly into this story I had already added Mr. Alatorre on my favorite authors list.” KayBay 1096, Amazon review

“This is the first book I’ve read by Dan Alatorre; he quickly shot to the top of my must-read list!” Bibliophile, Amazon review

“This is the first book I have ever read by Dan Alatorre and I love it.” Jobear, Amazon review

“not the first book I’ve read of Dan’s (I’ve loved them all) but this is probably my favorite!” Angela Kay Amazon review

“Dan is a wonderful author.” Angela Gallagher, Amazon review

“This is my genre and Dan Alatorre gave me just exactly what I wanted. A plot that kept me guessing all the way until the end.” Deb H, Amazon review

“I loved this book — it’s just what a serial killer/police procedural should be, thanks to author Dan Alatorre!” Linda McKay, Amazon review

“makes you feel like you are right there living this nightmare” Karina S Thibodeau, Amazon review

“a ride that will have you sweating and so compelling that you can’t stop reading.” Tracy Holbrook, Amazon Review

“very fast paced and intense. I stayed up late at night to finish it.” Susan Green, Amazon review

“Dan has, to me, the writing style of Dean Koontz” Cheryl Hall, Amazon review

“kept me up all night . . . Truly an enjoyable read.” Joseph DiFrede, Amazon review

“Double Blind became my favorite Dan Alatorre book just a few chapters in.” Claire N, Amazon review

“Great author!!” Diana Martinez, Amazon review

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Praise for Dan Alatorre, author of DOUBLE BLIND

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From Amazon reviews of my murder mystery Double Blind

“Dan Alatorre is one of the best mystery/thriller writers ever!” Cheryl Shearin, Amazon review

“Shortly into this story I had already added Mr. Alatorre on my favorite authors list.” KayBay 1096, Amazon review

“This is the first book I’ve read by Dan Alatorre; he quickly shot to the top of my must-read list!” Bibliophile, Amazon review

“This is the first book I have ever read by Dan Alatorre and I love it.” Jobear, Amazon review

“not the first book I’ve read of Dan’s (I’ve loved them all) but this is probably my favorite!” Angela Kay Amazon review

“Dan is a wonderful author.” Angela Gallagher, Amazon review

“This is my genre and Dan Alatorre gave me just exactly what I wanted. A plot that kept me guessing all the way until the end.” Deb H, Amazon review

“I loved this book — it’s just what a serial killer/police procedural should be, thanks to author Dan Alatorre!” Linda McKay, Amazon review

“makes you feel like you are right there living this nightmare” Karina S Thibodeau, Amazon review

“a ride that will have you sweating and so compelling that you can’t stop reading.” Tracy Holbrook, Amazon Review

“very fast paced and intense. I stayed up late at night to finish it.” Susan Green, Amazon review

“Dan has, to me, the writing style of Dean Koontz” Cheryl Hall, Amazon review

“kept me up all night . . . Truly an enjoyable read.” Joseph DiFrede, Amazon review

“Double Blind became my favorite Dan Alatorre book just a few chapters in.” Claire N, Amazon review

“Great author!!” Diana Martinez, Amazon review

 

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Feeling The Love, Love, Love!

Got both of these emails yesterday:

“Being the first of his books I have read, I must emphasize, Dan Alatorre is one of the best mystery/thriller writers ever! Just when you think he has given you the answer to the crime, he writes the next chapter and you know you have just jumped to a conclusion, not the answer to the crime. He keeps you guessing and guessing until the end!

I compliment Dan on the twists, turns, and events that create such a feeling of rational decisiveness regarding “who-done-it” and throwing in a curve-ball that proves rationality wrong. His descriptive writing will keep you on the edge of your seat and I will not be surprised if I have visions of this story in my dreams.

Dan’s writing is what true mystery should be. 10 Thumbs up!”

This email came in a little later:

“To say I’m impressed by The Gamma Sequence would be an understatement. I was so enjoying the book I almost emailed you about halfway through, but I thought the story might flail toward the end, so I held off. When XXXXXXXXXXX, I knew you’d crossed the finish line with flying colors. (The ending) — I didn’t see that coming, but maybe that’s why XXXXXXXXX. It certainly leaves the opening for another book and explains (otter things). It may have even accounted for XXXXXXXX. Your book was masterful. I loved Gamma Sequence. ”

You know, gang, days like that will pick you up. When you get a review that connects, or a few, copy them and put them where you can find them when you’re having a hard day – which we all do from time to time. Strangers who think your writing rocks can get you through the worst day.

Stayed up finishing The Gamma Sequence. First…WOW!

The Gamma SequenceHi Dan,
So I’m really tired.

Stayed up finishing The Gamma Sequence.

First…wow!

I love your voice. Your characters come alive.

Your plot was action packed, should have a warning for those with a weak heart.

I really couldn’t put it down.

Hank was great for all his flaws…

As a RN, I’ve done enough genetic research to know your plot line is plausible. Definitely a future worry!

Great book!

-MR

 

#Bookreview #Giveaway – Double Blind by Dan Alatorre

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What Amazon says

Two detectives hunt a serial killer. The killer’s hunting them.

A lone trucker is ambushed, shot, and brutally stabbed. A tourist meets the same fate while out for a jog. Facing two crime scenes that could have come from a horror movie, Detectives Carly Sanderson and Sergio Martin search for the crazed serial killer. Five more attacks happen in a week, launching the entire city into a panic and causing the mayor to throw all of the city’s resources into stopping the rampage. But while the detectives work around the clock, they don’t know the killer has upped the game – by making them his next targets.

My review

Have you ever wondered what drives a killer to murder? What goes on inside their minds at the moment when they take the life of another human being? How do they justify their actions? Dan Alatorre gives the…

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“Only Wrong Once”: A medical thriller that could be fact instead of fiction

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Only Wrong Once

Only Wrong Once, by Jennifer Ruff is a fast paced medical thriller that deals with international bio-terrorism on a personal level, bringing it all home in a big way. Maybe the reason this tale hits a nerve is that there are similar stories in the news every day, and Only Wrong Once made me wonder about the stories we don’t hear about.

Quinn Traynor is a U.S. intelligence agent out to save the world from terrorism, but his next case will hit closer to home than most of the terrorist attacks he’s worked to thwart. When a plot to strike terror into Americans in pandemic proportions with a bio-terrorism attack, the clock is ticking to find and stop the terrorists before they can carry out their deadly plan. Time is running out for the terrorists, too, maybe faster than anyone thinks, and if they succeed, time may be running…

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Sneak Peek at Double Blind, Book 2: Primary Target

img_2351-19PRIMARY TARGET, Double Blind Book 2

is coming soon!

But YOU can check out chapter one right now! I might even post other chapters as I write them.

Tentative Blurb:

After a major screw up, Detective Sergio Martin gets suspended—right as his partner Carly Sanderson gets thrust into the spotlight on Tampa Bay This Morning. Stuck working a politician’s security detail, Sergio is frustrated when a sniper begins taking out random hostages, and he can’t help with the investigation. His partner is on the rise while his own ship is sinking. The best way to get his mind off things is to assist his new friend Tyree in what seem to be an unrelated matters. Even with the victims piling up, one politician is determined to show his courage by continuing to hold large, outdoor rallies for the upcoming primary election, and Sergio is forced to watch from the sidelines as the mayor leans on rising star Carly, who can’t seem to catch a break in the sniper case.

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Chapter 1

The lady in the pink sweater had a friendly smile and a nice demeanor; it would be a shame to kill her.

The assassin took a deep breath and lined up the crosshairs of the rifle scope. Putting a bullet through the third button on the cashmere cardigan would give the woman a major wound to the torso—painful, and not necessarily a certain kill—but a very high probability.

Seven or eight points, if she were a paper target.

Easing a finger near the trigger, the killer assessed another shot. Four inches under the top button would pierce the lady’s heart. Nine points. She would fall to the ground and bleed out in seconds.

Drop and flop, but it’s quick. Not the worst way to go.

The huge bullet would send a spray of red behind the woman, like someone had spritzed the air with a Windex bottle filled with cherry Kool Aid. A jerk to the body from the impact, then the sweater lady would lose all muscle control and slump to the concrete platform, a puppet suddenly without strings. Her lifeless head would hit the floor with a loud, sharp whack. Pools of red would spill forth. Some of the people around her—men in suits, mostly—would run for cover, and a few would dash to her side, but that would prove futile. She’d be dead before she hit the ground.

A bead of sweat rolled down the killer’s cheek.

Then would come all the panic, the wondering, the fear. Wide eyes scanning all around, some looking for a place to run and hide; some looking for a shooter. Shouts for 911, shouts for CPR, shouts of fear . . .

But in all that chaos, a calm assailant can slip away unseen and undetected.

The planning was meticulous. Perfect. Practiced. Everything thought out in advance.

The killer panned the scope to the right. A man in a charcoal gray suit came into the cross hairs, then the man next to him. They pointed at banners, nodding and frowning to each other, acting very important. Would they try to help the sweater lady if she dropped to the stage floor with a fountain gushing from her chest? Or would the suits run behind one of the red, white, and blue façades the stage workers were rigging for Tampa’s live mayoral primary broadcast?

Who’d help you, pink lady, if I pulled the trigger today?

The sniper let out a long, slow breath, and lowered the rifle.

“Not today, Pinky.”

A gentle press with a finger slid the weapon’s safety into place, and the assassin backed out of the kill nest.

“Time to go do a little target practice. But I’ll be back.”

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“Hey, partner—are you excited?” Detective Sergio Martin pressed his phone to his ear, pacing back and forth across the car wash lobby as foam and water splattered the large window next to him. A plastic Christmas tree stood in front of the glass; on the other side, a burnt-orange Camaro with black hood stripes rolled by.

“Excited? No.” Carly said. “More like nervous. Maybe panic attack-ready.”

“Dude, you’ll do fine.” He waved a hand. “I’ll pick you up afterwards and we’ll go have lunch, then we can watch the whole interview at my place. I’m recording it.”

“Um, well—Kyle is picking me up. He and the boys are taking me to lunch. But I’ll get with you after.”

“Right! Sure.” Sergio’s face fell. “Yeah, you should celebrate with your family.” He glanced at the Camaro as mechanical hoses doused it with wax. “How do you want me to get your car back to you?”

“Come to lunch with us. You’re invited.”

“No, no, no. Let them share in your big moment.”

“It’s our moment. We’re a team. We caught the serial killer together.”

Sergio fingered the stitches on his upper hip. “Hmm. Well, I suppose after today’s TV appearance, you’ll probably need a bodyguard to keep your swarms of fans away.”

“Bleh. Don’t make me any more nervous than I already am.”

“I could head up your entourage . . . stick by your side day and night . . .”

“Day and night, huh?”

He smiled. “Hey, did they send a limo for you? I heard they do that.”

“It was a van. And it smelled funny.”

“Still counts.”

“Are you getting my oil changed for me?”

“Wow.” Sergio chuckled. “You went diva fast.”

“What? You said—”

“Yes, yes. I’m joking.” He peered through the soapy glass at the orange Camaro. “Your pretty little Halloween parade float is getting all gussied up as we speak.”

“Hey, you love my car.”

“I do. And for the record, I totally hate you right now. I’m completely filled with jealousy.”

“I bet. They should have sent you for this. It’s right up your alley.”

He shrugged. “Sadly, I didn’t fit with channel eight’s theme of Women Leaders Week.”

“Oops, they’re calling me.” The phone rustled on Carly’s end. “Wish me luck.”

The car wash cashier walked into the lobby and held up a set of car keys. “Orange Camaro?”

Sergio waved at the clerk. “Knock ‘em dead, partner. And, hey—did you wear your blue jacket?”

There was no reply. He held the phone away from his face.

Call ended.

The clerk approached, holding out a service ticket. Sergio put the phone back to his ear and cleared his throat. “Because you look awesome in blue. Okay, good luck. Bye.” He smiled at the clerk. “My partner’s going to be on TV this morning.”

“Uh-huh. That’s eleven-fifty for the car wash and thirty-nine for the oil change, $54.73 total with tax.”

Sergio winced. “Wow. Yeah, okay.” He dug into his pocket and pulled out his wallet, removing a credit card.

The clerk stepped behind the counter, swiping the card across the top of the cash register and handing it back. “Car’s out front.”

“Thanks.” Easing the wallet past his stitches, he slid it back into his jeans and took a step toward the door. His phone buzzed. His spirits lifted as he checked the screen, expecting Carly to be calling with a last-minute request for advice. Maybe she’d requested he participate in the interview via phone.

Instead, DeShawn Marshall’s name appeared on the screen. Sergio pressed the button and put the phone to his ear. “Hey, boss, I’m not sure I’m allowed to talk to you while I’m still on medical leave. Could cause a worker’s comp thing.”

“Guess who’s about to take down your old buddy Lucas Parmenter?”

Sergio’s head snapped upright. “Get the hell out of here. Really?”

“We got a tip and tracked him to the abandoned Payless shoe store on Gray Street. I’m perched on the roof across the street. That old boy’s about ten minutes away from retiring as a professional car thief.”

“Gray Street? Sarge, I’m literally, like, right around the corner.”

“Oh, no you don’t. This was a courtesy call. Don’t get any ideas.”

“What?” Sergio bolted across the lobby and out the door. “You’re breaking up, sir.”

“No, Sergio. Don’t come over here!”

“I can’t hear you, boss!” Sergio ended the call and ran for the Camaro.

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Carly wiped her hands on her skirt as she followed the Production Assistant. Random coils of cable and wood-framed sets lined the narrow hallway. The young lady occasionally put her hand to her phone headset, but otherwise kept walking—fast.

“Right this way, Ms. Sanderson—I mean, Detective.”

“Carly’s fine, ma’am.”

“I’m Jeannie.” The young lady turned and smiled. “If you need anything, I’ll be right out front, center stage on the right. Next to the big camera.”

Big camera.

The words shot a jolt of adrenaline through Carly. She swallowed hard and took a deep breath, following the skinny twenty-something toward a brightly lit stage with a huge red couch and a giant Christmas wreath.

Stepping into the studio, Carly did her best to smile. The hosts of Tampa Bay This Morning busied themselves with shuffling papers or a hair touch-up.

“We’re on a commercial break right now, Detective. Your segment is after the next break, and I’ll be conducting your pre-interview in here.” The P. A. pushed open a large door, revealing a room with several couches, a mirror, a TV with a live feed of the broadcast, and a big table filled with fruit and yogurt. “Coffee’s in the corner, but we recommend you drink water so your mouth doesn’t dry out during the interview.”

The word interview sent another ripple through Carly. She had the sudden urge to use the restroom.

“And of course, the bathrooms are right there in the back.” The P. A. put her hand to her headset again. “Please make yourself comfortable, Ms. Sanderson. I’ll—”

“Carly.”

“—Carly. I’ll be right back.” She spun around and disappeared, closing the big door behind her.

Carly stared at the table of breakfast items, completely un-hungry. The male host of Tampa Bay This Morning, John Harkins, appeared on the TV screen. “Welcome back. Coming up, we have part of the heroic team that took down the Seminole Heights serial killer, Detective Carly Sanderson.”

The effervescent Cheryl Hills took over. “But first, the weather.”

Upon hearing her name on TV, Carly raced for the restroom.

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Sergio hoisted himself over the last rung of the fire escape ladder and crawled onto the gravel rooftop. “Psst.”

Sergeant Marshall shook his head, not looking back at the detective. “I don’t hear you because you aren’t here.”

“Oh, I’m absolutely not.” Sergio squinted in the bright sunlight, moving toward his boss. “But Sarge, you need more units for this takedown. This guy’s going to run.”

“No, he’s not. Stop that.” Sergeant Marshall inched forward on his belly, peering over the raised edge of the shop’s gravel roof. He lifted his binoculars to his eyes. “First of all, he doesn’t know we’re here, but we have other units on the way.”

“Feel’s too easy. Plus, he’s a killer now.”

“Eh, I don’t think he went looking to shoot that security guard.” DeShawn handed Sergio the binoculars. “This guy likes stealing cars, not killing people. We got an early Christmas present. Enjoy it.”

“Ho, ho, ho,” Sergio grumbled, staring at the vacant shoe store. No lights appeared to be on inside. Out front, a red Ferrari sat parked by the curb. Bits of trash flittered across the sidewalk, pushed by the warm, humid breeze. “He’s out in broad daylight—after all these years? And driving that?” Sergio crawled backwards from the roof edge and sat up, brushing bits of gravel from his chest and hands. “I don’t like it.”

The sergeant’s gaze remained trained on the vacant shoe store. “Somebody else is gonna get your collar, is that it?”

“No. I’m telling you, it’s not his style. The second he comes out of there, he’s gonna run.”

“And I’m telling you to pipe down.” Deshawn wiped a bead of sweat from the back of his neck. “You’re not even supposed to be here. Just sit tight and watch the takedown. Don’t get me in hot water for calling you.”

*  *  *  *  *

The sergeant’s radio squawked. “Team leader Alpha, your support units are en route. We will be in position within five minutes.”

The team leader was quick with his reply. “Roger that. All units, get ready for takedown upon arrival. Spotters, keep eyes on the target.”

Deshawn smiled. “See? In about five minutes, your old case will be—”

He glanced over his shoulder. Sergio was gone.

The Ferrari’s engine started. The suspect, a tall African-American man in a long overcoat, walked toward it carrying two briefcases. With a tug, the passenger door opened and he got in. The shiny red car eased away from the curb, then the throaty motor growled and the car sped away.

Sergeant Marshall pounded the raised edge of the rooftop. “Crap, he’s running.”

The radio blared with activity. “All units, engage lights and sirens. The target is fleeing east on Gray Street.”

“Alpha leader, this is unit one. We’re not on scene yet.”

Marshall yanked his radio off his belt and crushed the red transmit button. “Well, get on scene! We’re losing him! Move to intercept him on Kennedy Boulevard. Unit two, head toward north Dale Mabry Highway. Those are his best escape points.”

He stood up, gritting his teeth and shaking his head as the Ferrari disappeared around a corner.

Below him, Detective Martin sprinted across the street toward a row of parked cars a block and a half up away.

The sergeant’s jaw dropped. “No, no, no, Sergio. What are you doing?”

*  *  *  *  *

Sergio yanked open the Camaro’s door and flung himself inside, jamming the key into the ignition and stomping the gas pedal. The engine had barely started when he slammed the gear shift into drive and mashed the pedal again. With its tires squealing and smoke pouring from the wheel wells, the orange car swerved onto Gray Street and sped after the Ferrari.

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